Inspired writing

The past few weeks we have been working on poetry and we had to start with a

simple sentence then add more detail to make it better. We had categories to choose from
such as space, fantasy and animals.

1. The girl swam in the water.
2. The girl swam in the deep blue water.
3. The girl glided like a gold fish through the deep blue water .
4. The girl glided like a gold fish through the deep blue water actively trying to escape the sharks.
5. Fearfully, the girl glided like a gold  fish through the deep blue shark infested waters
6. actively trying to escape them.
7. Fearfully, the girl glided like a gold  fish through the deep blue shark infested waters actively trying to escape them. Her only help being the faint light she held to keep track of the sharks whereabouts.

Fearfully, the girl glided like a gold  fish through the deep blue shark infested waters actively trying to escape them. Her only help being the faint light she held to keep track of the sharks whereabouts.

This is supposed to be my best sentence/s but I don't like its too detailed it sounds strange.

The meaning of the colours:

Vocab: R4 because I added similes and adjectives.